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gategrrlUgh. My stomach's upset from the soda, the two little slices of cake, and the two slices of pizza I ate this afternoon. The moonbounce for Mermaid's birthday party was a hit. And yuh, we're going to get another one for Little Guy's seventh b-day. I'll probably order from a different company, though, because this bouncer was too soft and had too many little air-leaks in it.
I've spent the day reading during the quiet moments, my Land of the Dead novella that I wrote for 2004 NaNoWriMo. It's rough. It needs a LOT of work. But the bones are there, and there's enough meat in it to expand up on it and fill it out. I'm half-way through it, and yes, I skipped ahead to the end pages. There's some *really* good stuff there, but in my notes within the text, I kept writing, "Must stick foreshadowing in earlier in the story, or the reader will be lost". And the ending doesn't really end, because at the time, I didn't know how to end it. So the following year, I wrote the continuation story of this, but ended up hating it. But some ideas are already percolating (a little) for the ending.
I think the way I'm going to revise is to completely abandon the current rough draft text, and rewrite totally (with the first draft there for reference). The language I used is much to grammatically casual, and it needs to be tightened up. The viewpoints keeps shifting, sometimes within a paragraph. And it's clear from reading where I wasn't sure about a concept and how it worked. I might even enjoy this rewrite.
I've spent the day reading during the quiet moments, my Land of the Dead novella that I wrote for 2004 NaNoWriMo. It's rough. It needs a LOT of work. But the bones are there, and there's enough meat in it to expand up on it and fill it out. I'm half-way through it, and yes, I skipped ahead to the end pages. There's some *really* good stuff there, but in my notes within the text, I kept writing, "Must stick foreshadowing in earlier in the story, or the reader will be lost". And the ending doesn't really end, because at the time, I didn't know how to end it. So the following year, I wrote the continuation story of this, but ended up hating it. But some ideas are already percolating (a little) for the ending.
I think the way I'm going to revise is to completely abandon the current rough draft text, and rewrite totally (with the first draft there for reference). The language I used is much to grammatically casual, and it needs to be tightened up. The viewpoints keeps shifting, sometimes within a paragraph. And it's clear from reading where I wasn't sure about a concept and how it worked. I might even enjoy this rewrite.
